Dancing Queen- for Meg Giry

[LittleLotte394]

All the "poor Meg" poems I've been reading lately have gotten to my head- here's proof:

There she stands, the Dancing Queen,
High upon the stage.
Although the dance she performs is old,
Her grace is without age.
Everyone applauds when the dance ends
As she smiles at what are thought of as friends.
But back up in her tiny room,
The tears come falling
Much too soon.

I do hope you enjoyed it- I haven't written poetry in a while, so my poet skills might be a little rusty.

[Simple Rose]

Though I'm a nitpick for parameter changes and stuff to do with poetry, this was rather good. Ends on kindof a haiku-ish note, but it's very effective. Well done!

[LittleLotte394]

Thanks for the feedback, Em. Like I said, I haven't written in a while, but I do try .

[Angel]

Hey, Lotte, I really enjoyed this Especially for being rusty on poetry ... I want to see what you write when you're all fired up!

I admit I'm fussy about rhyming poems as I think they're quite hard to do effectively. When all the rhythms are constant and the rhyming sounds natural, the poem sounds absolutely gorgeous. Yours is definitely fairly solid -- it's just "Everyone applauds when the dance ends" that seems to trip it up for me ... it might just be me, but it sounds like the stress is on 'the', which I find sounds awkward.

But I must say, the last bit is just awesome. As Em said, very effective! Great job ;D