Post by raoulsgem on Sept 15, 2005 20:59:46 GMT -5
I wrote this on Phantomoftheopera.com with some E/C parts but I have 2 ways to it (both E/C and R/M and R/C and E/M) I like the R/C way better but anyway here's the story:
Christine and Raoul walked out of the burning Opera house hand in hand.
“Christine tell me the truth are you really glad that you left him?” Raoul asked Christine once they had walked a block away from the Opera House.
Christine laid a kiss on Raoul’s lips and said:
“I did love him but I’m happy to leave him and be with you, because I love you more than anything”
“I was hoping you would say that Christine” Raoul said as he led her to his mansion.
“Raoul, how could I not love you? You were the one who I have loved longer than anybody else except for my father” Christine said
Raoul smiled a little bit, that made him feel wonderful.
“Christine, I love you” Raoul answered
Christine said nothing, but laid her head on Raoul’s shoulder as they walked into the mansion.
* * * * * * * * *
Erik walked through the passages wishing that he had never let Christine go.
“I should have just let her stay with me, I could have brought her here and we would have lived happily, no what am I thinking? She needs to be with somebody who can buy her the things she needs, not the things she already has and nothing else.
The path he was taking was long and different; he had never been through this passage before and confused himself whenever there were two different directions. Rage began to outgrow the kindness and compassion he had showed not to long ago.
“Why was I cursed like this?” Erik asked, his voice booming around the passageway.
Erik stood there after that, as if waiting for an avalanche or an angry mob come to kill him, but nothing happened, nothing at all.
What do you think of it so far?
Christine and Raoul walked out of the burning Opera house hand in hand.
“Christine tell me the truth are you really glad that you left him?” Raoul asked Christine once they had walked a block away from the Opera House.
Christine laid a kiss on Raoul’s lips and said:
“I did love him but I’m happy to leave him and be with you, because I love you more than anything”
“I was hoping you would say that Christine” Raoul said as he led her to his mansion.
“Raoul, how could I not love you? You were the one who I have loved longer than anybody else except for my father” Christine said
Raoul smiled a little bit, that made him feel wonderful.
“Christine, I love you” Raoul answered
Christine said nothing, but laid her head on Raoul’s shoulder as they walked into the mansion.
* * * * * * * * *
Erik walked through the passages wishing that he had never let Christine go.
“I should have just let her stay with me, I could have brought her here and we would have lived happily, no what am I thinking? She needs to be with somebody who can buy her the things she needs, not the things she already has and nothing else.
The path he was taking was long and different; he had never been through this passage before and confused himself whenever there were two different directions. Rage began to outgrow the kindness and compassion he had showed not to long ago.
“Why was I cursed like this?” Erik asked, his voice booming around the passageway.
Erik stood there after that, as if waiting for an avalanche or an angry mob come to kill him, but nothing happened, nothing at all.
What do you think of it so far?
? You took the words, yet again, right out of my mouth. So, raoulsgem, basically the same thing Angel said. Your fic seems to be starting on the right foot, just be careful with grammar and detail